do.ob Posted January 20, 2005 Share Posted January 20, 2005 ey, do.ob, i consider ur work as "other poem". it's not a haiku. make it 3 lines.. revise it pls. tips from a haiku teacher:haiku usually is written in small letters not unless d word is a proper noun.make a poem that give us concrete pictures. it shows, it does not tell. pls use picture words not abstract words, like instead of a "flower", u can name d flower like "sunflower", or instead of fruit, u can use "strawberry or apple". the fewer the words, the better.<{POST_SNAPBACK}> hi sunflower.. thanks for the tips! greatly appreciated them! ok... so haiku is much more complicated than it seems... coz the simpler and the fewer the words are in haiku, the more abstract the meaning becomes.... the harder it is to pinpoint what it really intends to say... which makes me think the guy who created haiku is a piscean.. for no one can be any more vague to other signs than a piscean. but to us, it's as simple as abc. so what i created is more of a chant than a haiku.. heheh.. cool! ;D here's another: yellow pollentwo bees suckinhoney lining more advice please.. Quote Link to comment
do.ob Posted January 20, 2005 Share Posted January 20, 2005 i just got this enlightening thought.. we seem to be like the thinkers of old... when plato's sitting, thinking, guiding, talking with his apprentices on a cliff.. sitting on rocks... under a tree... overlooking the ocean.. this thread looks like a really promising thread for thoughts... it's like that part of history has repeated itself now in the form of forums and threads... exchanging thoughts and ideas.... no singular adviser but anyone can help anyone else... Quote Link to comment
do.ob Posted January 20, 2005 Share Posted January 20, 2005 i just got this enlightening thought.. we seem to be like the thinkers of old... when plato's sitting, thinking, guiding, talking with his apprentices on a cliff.. sitting on rocks... under a tree... overlooking the ocean.. this thread looks like a really promising thread for thoughts... it's like that part of history has repeated itself now in the form of forums and threads... exchanging thoughts and ideas.... no singular adviser but anyone can help anyone else... Quote Link to comment
marilen Posted January 20, 2005 Share Posted January 20, 2005 (edited) kainggit naman kayo marunong kayo gumawa ng poems parang ndi yata ako nahilig dyan hehehe ndi ko pa nasusubok kung meron akong talent dyan wahehehe i knw pisceans are intelligent beings and i guess iba iba din ang ikot ng puyo natin wahehehe have a nice day everyoneeeeeeeee Edited January 21, 2005 by marilen Quote Link to comment
do.ob Posted January 20, 2005 Share Posted January 20, 2005 hi len.. just read your post.. hehe.. i got particularly caught with your signature about "friendship" not that i thought about friendship (or interaction) and how much i think it is of a factor in developing every single creature.... but rather about time and distance... hehehe... i have been thinking about these two things and their relationships to creation. i have this theory that god's only formulated work is time. distance is a concept developed by man because of the existence of time. and that when god or the gods created time, he created randomly all the other particles in the whole universe.. big or small... but they are all set randomly with the use of a lot of predefined factors (such as dream, death, destiny, desire, despair, destruction and delirium; the zodiacs; the seasons, etc.) on poetry... haha... sigurado ako kaya mo rin... ayaw mo lang kasi iba hilig mo.. pero we are very versatile beings... very maleable... kaya kahit ano isalpak sating mga pisceans, magagawa natin basta magfocus tayo dun. Quote Link to comment
SunflowR Posted January 20, 2005 Share Posted January 20, 2005 ^ very well said, do.ob. u got claps from me for making dat haiku. clap! clap! clap! see? u can do it , too, and marilen. i know, she can do it. but pisceans are versatile. i was a student of haiku before and still is. that's haiku for us, the nowness. 'am more observant now esp my environment. i always carry a pen and paper and everytime i encounter circumstance that caught my attention, u put it in writing. i need to so that i can't forget. more tips as shared by a haiku teacher:- on the first line of a haiku, state one time or season or incident like the setting sun, sunset, the rising moon, northern lights, moonless sky, etc. u can create.-on the second and third line, state d incident. my example: after the storm -thousands of people hide behind monster waves @SunflowR i dedicate dis haiku to d tragic event that happened last dec. 26, 2005, tsunami in southeast asia. write more, do.ob. where's george? Quote Link to comment
sidlopez_x Posted January 20, 2005 Share Posted January 20, 2005 malapit na bday natin? saan ang bday party? i was bornin vast oceanlife is beautiful! pwede na bang haiku yan? hehehe Quote Link to comment
sidlopez_x Posted January 20, 2005 Share Posted January 20, 2005 hi len.. just read your post.. hehe.. i got particularly caught with your signature about "friendship" not that i thought about friendship (or interaction) and how much i think it is of a factor in developing every single creature.... but rather about time and distance... hehehe... i have been thinking about these two things and their relationships to creation. i have this theory that god's only formulated work is time. distance is a concept developed by man because of the existence of time. and that when god or the gods created time, he created randomly all the other particles in the whole universe.. big or small... but they are all set randomly with the use of a lot of predefined factors (such as dream, death, destiny, desire, despair, destruction and delirium; the zodiacs; the seasons, etc.) on poetry... haha... sigurado ako kaya mo rin... ayaw mo lang kasi iba hilig mo.. pero we are very versatile beings... very maleable... kaya kahit ano isalpak sating mga pisceans, magagawa natin basta magfocus tayo dun. <{POST_SNAPBACK}> here's a thought.. time and distance pertain to the physical world. they are essetial elements of creation. try pondering on time and space rather than time and distance to get a better picture. Quote Link to comment
do.ob Posted January 20, 2005 Share Posted January 20, 2005 hehehe... nice nice to have you reacting, sid... hehehe.. no time to put more posts on this right now tho.. but yeah, ill get back with more interesting thoughts thanks so much! Quote Link to comment
SunflowR Posted January 20, 2005 Share Posted January 20, 2005 i dedicate dis haiku to d tragic event that happened last dec. 26, 2005, tsunami in southeast asia. <{POST_SNAPBACK}> oh, my goodness! that should be written dec. 26, 2004. baka sabihin 'am predicting another one. i don't want that to happen. my esp is strong but not to that. Quote Link to comment
SunflowR Posted January 20, 2005 Share Posted January 20, 2005 nice one , sidlopez_x. good try. mabuhay ung piscean. dats a gift no one can grab. ipagpatuloy mo. Quote Link to comment
marilen Posted January 21, 2005 Share Posted January 21, 2005 hi len.. just read your post.. hehe.. i got particularly caught with your signature about "friendship" not that i thought about friendship (or interaction) and how much i think it is of a factor in developing every single creature.... but rather about time and distance... hehehe... i have been thinking about these two things and their relationships to creation. i have this theory that god's only formulated work is time. distance is a concept developed by man because of the existence of time. and that when god or the gods created time, he created randomly all the other particles in the whole universe.. big or small... but they are all set randomly with the use of a lot of predefined factors (such as dream, death, destiny, desire, despair, destruction and delirium; the zodiacs; the seasons, etc.) on poetry... haha... sigurado ako kaya mo rin... ayaw mo lang kasi iba hilig mo.. pero we are very versatile beings... very maleable... kaya kahit ano isalpak sating mga pisceans, magagawa natin basta magfocus tayo dun. <{POST_SNAPBACK}> korek ka dyan hehehe saludo ako sa sinabi mo :cool: yan din ang napansin ko satin kahit ano basta may focus kaya natin me nga minsan tingnan ko lang eh then pag sinubukan ko na gawin kuha agad meron yata sariling takbo ang ating isip wahehehe :upside: Quote Link to comment
sidlopez_x Posted January 21, 2005 Share Posted January 21, 2005 There was an incident when my ex GF attended her bestfriend's debut. Ewan ko ba but I had this feeling that I MUST not allow her to attend it. I couldnt attend the event coz of some important commitment. I warned her that I have this feeling that if she attends this debut it might change our lives forever. But I have no choice so I allowed her. After that, it did changed our lives forever... WALA NA KAMI NGAYON. (kayo na bahalang magisip kung ano ang nangyari sa debut) :cry:<{POST_SNAPBACK}> ano nangyari? when did this happen? you knew it was coming? how? Quote Link to comment
do.ob Posted January 21, 2005 Share Posted January 21, 2005 hi sid... here's more on the time, distance and space thingie... disclaimer: these are just my thoughts.. i havent based them on any scientific book or anything pero these are just from observations and the random things going on in my mind (based from things ive seen, experienced, observed, derived, etc..) i believe that without time, there will not be distance. kasi say you stand at point A in laguna and you need to go to point B in manila.... if there's time, there is a distance travelled relative to time.. but if say, we can teleport from point A directly to point B, e di ala ng time required.. split second time probably pero that's all.. and that means almost removing the sense of distance.. or perhaps removing distance altogether.. posible di ba? sooo.. in essense, even the sense of space wont be existence if time dont exist. kasi travelling from one space to another would require time.. coz speed itself requires time. so yeah, i believe that if there's anything a god or a group of gods did create and put their guts out and perspired blood to create, it would be the concept of time. all other things, like animals, trees, plants, humans, birds.. we are given preprogrammed tasks or what we call INSTINCTS. we're just lucky to be the highest form of creation. and the internet is his tool to unite the world into one belief.. one god (or same essensed belief), one nation, one world, one universe. more thoughts when i get warped into god mode thinking again.. Quote Link to comment
do.ob Posted January 21, 2005 Share Posted January 21, 2005 ---------answers to my haikus: yellow pollentwo bees suckinhoney lining >>> that's the basic smiley face a spec of dustin a vast mediumsliding,weavingpiercing through atoms >>> that's a fish swimming in the ocean of salty water atoms. Quote Link to comment
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